The Proposal.

“Man, I’m hungry.”

She barely glanced at him before returning her attention to the the prism of lights twinkling at her from the jewelry store window.

“Hmmm? Okay, yeah, I guess I could eat something,” she said.

“Where do you want to go? The cafe at Tiffany’s for some rock soup?”

She glared at him. “Ha ha. Very funny.”

“Let’s go to Big Boy. We can even check out J. B. Robinson’s on the way if you want.”

“Really?”

“Sure. Then maybe you can look at me instead of all the sparklies.”

She beamed at him, and the joy in her smile cracked his heart. Grabbing his hand, she skipped over to the jewelry store and headed straight for the engagement rings.

“Oooh, look at that one,” she breathed, pointing at a small square solitaire.

“Wouldn’t you rather have one of those?” he asked, gesturing to the giant rocks glittering from the center of the case.

“Nah, I’d be too afraid of losing one of those. Plus, they’re just so gaudy!”

Just then a salesperson sidled over, smiling greasily. “Can I help you two lovebirds with anything?”

“Oh no,” she said. “I’m just dreaming.”

He looked at the longing on her face and his heart split a little more. “Actually, you can help us. Can we see that one right over there?”

“This one?” the salesperson asked, hovering over a diamond that was easily two carats.

“No. That one,” he said pointing to the ring that held her attention.

The salesperson handed it to him. His hand shook as he held it, examining the ring from every angle. “How many carats is this?”

“It’s just a third of a carat, but it’s cut for maximum sparkle,” the salesman answered.

He grabbed her hand and slid the ring on her finger. She looked up at him, uncertainty clouding her eyes.

“Well, do you like it?”

“I love it,” she whispered.

The crack grew again.

“You know, we have great financing plans,” the salesman said.

He listened to the spiel before nodding noncommittally. “Okay, thanks. Are you ready to get some dinner babe?”

They were both quiet as they picked at their hamburgers. Finally, she put her sandwich down and sat back with a sigh.

“When the time comes, I’d like something just like that, okay?”

His heart split in two.

“You mean in 2012?” he grinned. “I’ll try to remember that.”

“Whatever, smart ass. Hey, before we go, I’d like to stop at Vicky’s Secret, okay?”

“You know, I have something else I want to check out. Why don’t you head on over there and I’ll meet you in the center court?”

Once she was safely out of sight, he headed back to the jewelry store.

The salesman’s greasy smile grew wider as he greeted him.

“Back to buy the little lady a present?”

“Y-yeah. Can I fill out a credit application?”

A short while later he exited the store, the blue velvet box growing clammy in his sweaty hands. She sat waiting for him on a stone bench with a frown on her face.

He took a deep breath and walked over to her.

She glanced up. “Brian, where have you been? I’ve been waiting…”

Her words trailed off as he got down on his knee in front of her.

“What are you…”

“Amber, will you marry me?”

“Are you serious?”

He nodded, shaking hand opening the box.

“Well, I…yes! Of course I’ll marry you!”

Tears cascaded down her cheeks as he slid the ring on her finger.

“I’m sorry I’m so unromantic,” he said, voice cracking.

“Don’t worry. You’re perfect for me.”

And that, my friends, is how I got engaged in the mall. This post was inspired by this week’s prompt at the Red Dress Club, which asked us to write a 600 word story where someone tells a joke and someone cries. As usual, I took liberties.

45 Comments on The Proposal.

  1. Valerie
    February 4, 2011 at 4:56 pm (5 years ago)

    This story is perfect too! I loved it!

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    • Amber
      February 5, 2011 at 8:56 am (5 years ago)

      Thank you!

      Reply
  2. Rebecca
    February 4, 2011 at 5:11 pm (5 years ago)

    I love it. Brought happy tears to my eyes. I might have to share my engagement story.

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    • Amber
      February 5, 2011 at 8:54 am (5 years ago)

      You absolutely should. I’d like to hear, well read, it.

      Reply
  3. Andrea
    February 4, 2011 at 5:40 pm (5 years ago)

    Shut up! You seriously got engaged in the mall? I love it. That is so cool. Great writing and recapping. Thank you for sharing such an intimate moment with all of us. I was so caught up in the story that I didn’t even realize it was your name! Duh … 😀

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    • Amber
      February 5, 2011 at 8:54 am (5 years ago)

      Seriously did. I was hoping no one would notice, so good job in not realizing it was my name!

      Reply
  4. NotJustAnotherJennifer
    February 4, 2011 at 5:42 pm (5 years ago)

    Aw, so sweet! I had goosebumps reading it, and then when I saw it was true, I got tears in my eyes! I’m a sap for a good love story. Great job!

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    • Amber
      February 5, 2011 at 8:54 am (5 years ago)

      Ohhh good! I’m glad I sucked you in!

      Reply
  5. Melanie
    February 4, 2011 at 6:42 pm (5 years ago)

    Ah….very sweet. You have a knack for storytelling. I was totally hooked in. Even better that it is actually a true story. Great job.

    Just stopped over from the RDC.

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    • Amber
      February 5, 2011 at 8:53 am (5 years ago)

      Thank you! That’s a great compliment!

      Reply
  6. Jennifer
    February 4, 2011 at 8:04 pm (5 years ago)

    Aw, I thought it was romantic, especially because it was so hard and awkward for him. Hopefully, she bought something appropriate at Vicky’s to celebrate!

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    • Amber
      February 5, 2011 at 8:53 am (5 years ago)

      I don’t remember, but I have certainly done my part in that department in all the years since!

      Reply
  7. HonestConvoGal
    February 4, 2011 at 9:08 pm (5 years ago)

    Your use of dialogue to tell the story is great. I didn’t have any idea you were telling a nonfiction story until your explanation at the end. That’s a great compliment to your nonfiction story telling. Often nonfiction writers over explicate and under story-tell. Nice job.

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    • Amber
      February 5, 2011 at 8:52 am (5 years ago)

      Thank you! It’s I guess slightly fictional, as I have no idea what was going through his head, but the bones of the story are all true!

      Reply
  8. Leighann
    February 4, 2011 at 9:24 pm (5 years ago)

    I think that is the most romantic engagement story ever

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    • Amber
      February 5, 2011 at 8:51 am (5 years ago)

      I will tell him you said so. I think that will make him happy.

      Reply
  9. AmyBlam
    February 4, 2011 at 9:46 pm (5 years ago)

    Wow. That is such a lovely story, love it!

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    • Amber
      February 5, 2011 at 8:51 am (5 years ago)

      Thank you. Who needs sunsets and champagne!

      Reply
  10. Elona
    February 4, 2011 at 10:37 pm (5 years ago)

    And you didn’t even make him ask you every day for six months straight!

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    • Amber
      February 5, 2011 at 8:50 am (5 years ago)

      But that does make for a unique story…an you know he really wanted to get married!

      Reply
  11. Missy @ Wonder, Friend
    February 4, 2011 at 11:32 pm (5 years ago)

    So perfect all the way around. This may be my favorite engagement story ever. Ever.

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    • Amber
      February 5, 2011 at 8:50 am (5 years ago)

      Wow. Thanks!

      Reply
  12. Carrie
    February 4, 2011 at 11:44 pm (5 years ago)

    AWWWWWW!!! That was awesome. And such a great story!

    Visiting from RDC

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    • Amber
      February 5, 2011 at 8:49 am (5 years ago)

      It was one of the most spontaneous things he’s ever done. If you’re going to be spontaneous, might as well go big, right?

      Reply
    • Amber
      February 5, 2011 at 8:49 am (5 years ago)

      Thanks. These challenges are fun!

      Reply
  13. Mandyland
    February 5, 2011 at 1:42 am (5 years ago)

    Awwww….that is one of the sweetest engagement stories I’ve ever heard. I loved it.

    And, considering this is your story, I love that you told it from HIS perspective.

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    • Amber
      February 5, 2011 at 8:49 am (5 years ago)

      Thanks. I figured I needed to make it at least a little creative considering the company I’m keeping!

      Reply
  14. Lise
    February 5, 2011 at 3:27 am (5 years ago)

    I got engaged at the mall, too!!! :o) My hubby likes to joke that our “awesome” engagement story happened right between Orange Julius and Hot Dog-on-a-Stick. Personally, I don’t care where it happened, so long as it happened. He’s my Prince Charming and he could have proposed in a port-a-potty for all I care.

    Okay, maybe that’s taking it a little too far… But you know what I mean. :o)

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    • Amber
      February 5, 2011 at 8:48 am (5 years ago)

      Maybe not a port-a-potty. You wouldn’t want to have to fish the ring out of that toilet. Ewwwwww. It’s fun to know we’re not the only ones – all these years later, he still has a complex over it!

      Reply
  15. Ratz
    February 5, 2011 at 3:56 am (5 years ago)

    OMG. That really happened! I can’t even believe it… You are one lucky chick. Great story. :-)

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    • Amber
      February 5, 2011 at 8:47 am (5 years ago)

      Yep. It really did. The funniest part was when we went home to tell my parents and my dad choked on his food. I should’ve waited till they finished eating, I guess

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  16. Angelia Sims Hardy
    February 5, 2011 at 11:18 am (5 years ago)

    Love engagement stories!! How wonderful and told in such a sweet way. I wasn’t sure if it was going to happen. Awesome. :-)

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    • Amber
      February 6, 2011 at 8:22 am (5 years ago)

      I wasn’t sure either (at the time). Thank you!

      Reply
  17. Ashley
    February 5, 2011 at 12:41 pm (5 years ago)

    Super sweet and sentimentally romantic. Great story! My ring came in the same blue velvet box. Love it!

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    • Amber
      February 6, 2011 at 8:21 am (5 years ago)

      I think I even still have the box. Somewhere. Thank you!

      Reply
  18. CDG
    February 5, 2011 at 11:24 pm (5 years ago)

    I love that you got engaged in a mall, and that you can tell your engagement story and it reads like a good story.

    What a sweet guy!

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    • Amber
      February 6, 2011 at 8:20 am (5 years ago)

      Thanks! It was so long go, it almost feels like “once upon a time” these days…

      Reply
  19. Amanda
    February 5, 2011 at 11:47 pm (5 years ago)

    Such a lovely story, and so sweet to hear how he proposed to you. My husband’s proposal was truly a sweet one, too. We have such amazing guys!

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    • Amber
      February 6, 2011 at 8:20 am (5 years ago)

      Truer words were never spoken!

      Reply
  20. Mama Duck
    February 6, 2011 at 7:48 am (5 years ago)

    and in real life, you probably didn’t see it coming either. :) great engagement story.

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  21. Elizabeth Flora Ross
    February 6, 2011 at 1:26 pm (5 years ago)

    Awwwww! Love it! Funny timing, too. Last night to celebrate our anniversary, my hubby and I had dinner at the restaurant where he proposed to me! 😉

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    • Amber
      February 6, 2011 at 8:50 pm (5 years ago)

      That’s a great idea for an anniversary. We’d have to drive seven hours to get to that mall, so I don’t think we ever will. 😉

      Reply
  22. Sherri
    February 6, 2011 at 5:34 pm (5 years ago)

    I loved this! I felt like I was the girl, imagining the feelings….but felt the guy’s heart tugging in two as well.

    Great use of the prompt!

    Reply
    • Amber
      February 6, 2011 at 8:47 pm (5 years ago)

      Thank you! That’s a lovely compliment!

      Reply

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